Huh... Nil reminds me a little bit of Severus Snape in the third panel. He reminded me MUCH MORE of Severus Snape before Lady Meip pointed out what was wrong with the lineart.

Yes, I am a perfectionist. I know I'm being nitpicky....but pay attention to Lemon's skin tone from page 1-23. Notice the changes. Lan and Nil, too, though not quite as much. I think you might be overdoing the satin effect or whatever 'tis in photoshop, too. (E.g. panel 2, Lemon's neck.)

Yes, I know I'm a perfectionist. Show me these before you post them, love, and I shall write happy things all through the comments. Like that I love the expressions on all their faces. E>